Bar Chart Model Essay
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The bar chart shows the divorce rates in two European countries from 2011 to 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The data given compares the divorce rates in Finland and Sweden over a five-year period, from 2011 to 2015. Overall, it is evident that both countries experienced fluctuations in their divorce rates, though Sweden consistently had higher rates than Finland for the entire period.
In 2011, Sweden's divorce rate was just under 50%, while Finland's was approximately 35%. Over the next year, both countries saw a decline in their rates, with Sweden decreasing to around 45% and Finland to about 33%. However, in 2013, Finland experienced a significant rise in divorces, reaching nearly the same level as Sweden at about 45%.
The following year, 2014, Sweden's divorce rate fell back to roughly 40%, with Finland's rate decreasing as well, but only marginally. In contrast, 2015 saw an increase in the divorce rate for Finland, up to nearly 40%, whereas Sweden’s rate remained unchanged from the previous year.
The most notable trend is the peak in Finland’s divorce rate in 2013, where it closed the gap with Sweden. Despite Sweden’s higher rates overall, the data from 2015 indicates a convergence of divorce rates between the two nations.
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➡️ Why this essay qualifies for a Band 9 score
Your summary is clear and well-structured, providing a comparative overview of the divorce rates in Finland and Sweden from 2011 to 2015. You have effectively highlighted the main trends and made appropriate comparisons.
In 2011, Sweden's divorce rate was just under 50%, while Finland's was approximately 35%. Over the next year, both countries saw a decline in their rates, with Sweden decreasing to around 45% and Finland to about 33%. However, in 2013, Finland experienced a significant rise in divorces, reaching nearly the same level as Sweden at about 45%.
The following year, 2014, Sweden's divorce rate fell back to roughly 40%, with Finland's rate decreasing as well, but only marginally. In contrast, 2015 saw an increase in the divorce rate for Finland, up to nearly 40%, whereas Sweden’s rate remained unchanged from the previous year.
The most notable trend is the peak in Finland’s divorce rate in 2013, where it closed the gap with Sweden. Despite Sweden’s higher rates overall, the data from 2015 indicates a convergence of divorce rates between the two nations.
206 words
➡️ Why this essay qualifies for a Band 9 score
Your summary is clear and well-structured, providing a comparative overview of the divorce rates in Finland and Sweden from 2011 to 2015. You have effectively highlighted the main trends and made appropriate comparisons.
- Task Achievement: You have successfully summarized the key information and made relevant comparisons.
- Coherence and Cohesion: The information is presented in a logical order, and the overall progression is clear.
- Lexical Resource: The vocabulary is generally appropriate
- Grammatical Range and Accuracy: The grammar is mostly accurate, with some complex structures used effectively.
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The chart below shows the expenditure of two countries on consumer goods in 2010
The chart illustrates the amount of money spent on five consumer goods (cars, computers, books, perfume and cameras) in France and the UK in 2010. Units are measured in pounds sterling.
Overall, the UK spent more money on consumer goods than France in the period given. Both the British and the French spent most of their money on cars whereas the least amount of money was spent on perfume in the UK compared to cameras in France. Furthermore, the most significant difference in expenditure between the two countries was on cameras.
In terms of cars, people in the UK spent about £450,000 on this as opposed to the French at £400,000. Similarly, the British expenditure was higher on books than the French (around £400,000 and £300,000 respectively). In the UK, expenditure on cameras (just over £350,000) was over double that of France, which was only £150,000.
On the other hand, the amount of money paid out on the remaining goods was higher in France. Above £350,000 was spent by the French on computers which was slightly more than the British who spent exactly £350,000. Neither of the countries spent much on perfume which accounted for £200,000 of expenditure in France but under £150,000 in the UK.
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➡️ This essay qualifies for a Band 9 score
Overall, the UK spent more money on consumer goods than France in the period given. Both the British and the French spent most of their money on cars whereas the least amount of money was spent on perfume in the UK compared to cameras in France. Furthermore, the most significant difference in expenditure between the two countries was on cameras.
In terms of cars, people in the UK spent about £450,000 on this as opposed to the French at £400,000. Similarly, the British expenditure was higher on books than the French (around £400,000 and £300,000 respectively). In the UK, expenditure on cameras (just over £350,000) was over double that of France, which was only £150,000.
On the other hand, the amount of money paid out on the remaining goods was higher in France. Above £350,000 was spent by the French on computers which was slightly more than the British who spent exactly £350,000. Neither of the countries spent much on perfume which accounted for £200,000 of expenditure in France but under £150,000 in the UK.
191 words
➡️ This essay qualifies for a Band 9 score
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The chart below gives information about the ratio of income to spending (in dollars) by Americans by age range in 2013. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
This graph compares how much Americans spent to how much income they made in 2013, by age group. The data shows an overall rise and fall in both income and spending between young, middle-aged, and older Americans. Income rises and falls more sharply than spending.
Those under 25 and over 75 actually spent slightly more than they earned. In contrast, between the ages of 25 and 64, Americans earned 10,000 to 20,000 dollars more than they spent. This difference shrinks in the 65-74 age group, where spending was just a few thousand dollars less.
In terms of actual numbers, those under 25 or over 75 earned and spent around 30,000 and 35,000 dollars, respectively. 25-34 year-olds and 65-74 year-olds both earned in the 50,000s and spent in the 40,000s. In the middle, between ages 35 and 64, income was 70,000-80,000 dollars, and spending ranged from roughly 55 to 60 thousand.
158 words
➡️ This essay qualifies for a Band 9 score
Those under 25 and over 75 actually spent slightly more than they earned. In contrast, between the ages of 25 and 64, Americans earned 10,000 to 20,000 dollars more than they spent. This difference shrinks in the 65-74 age group, where spending was just a few thousand dollars less.
In terms of actual numbers, those under 25 or over 75 earned and spent around 30,000 and 35,000 dollars, respectively. 25-34 year-olds and 65-74 year-olds both earned in the 50,000s and spent in the 40,000s. In the middle, between ages 35 and 64, income was 70,000-80,000 dollars, and spending ranged from roughly 55 to 60 thousand.
158 words
➡️ This essay qualifies for a Band 9 score
- This essay is borderline risky when it comes to word count. But it still manages to sit at 158 words
- The response includes all important details listed in the instructions. The basic topic of the graph (debt to income for different age groups) is stated, followed by an overview of the tends, and some detailed comparisons of specific age groups and income levels.
- Each aspect of the essay gets its own paragraph, with a paragraph for the basic purpose of the graph, a paragraph for overall trends, and so on. This helps to clearly divide each different type of important information.
- Transitions and referential phrases are used effectively to show how ideas are interlinked. Examples include “in contrast,” “this difference” and “in terms of actual numbers.”
- Vocabulary and grammar are both excellent. No errors here, and some nice variety of sentence structure and word choice too. This makes the essay both easy and interesting to read.